The Fallen Angel (commentary)

Thu Jan 01, 1970 2:00 am

It was short so I could read it quickly, yay ^_^ 
 
I liked it, some odd typos and such here and there that made it a little too amusing to read, but other than that I liked it. That shogun is an ass, I'm liking Shin so far.

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Post by **Anita4442001** » Fri Nov 14, 2003 2:22 pm

Very good I think. 
 
Some good things: Excellent ending. 
 
Some bad things: Went a wee bit too fast. 
 
Another good thing: Liked your conversation. You can tell they're selish. 
 
A little bad thing: the big Japanese words are a little hard to follow, but since you told what they were in ENGLISH, it doesn't make too much of a difference. 
 
4.5 stars out of 5.

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Post by **Dead Rapter** » Fri Nov 14, 2003 2:26 pm

It's Japanese custom, especially in the Samurai era, to be short and direct with little juice to conversations. I kinda put a little juice in to make it a little easier to comprehend, and to flow....

<div style="text-align:center"> 
I'll miss the winter 
A world of fragile things 
Look for me in the white forest 
Hiding in a hollow tree 
 
~My Last Breath, Evanscenece~ 
<hr /> 
<img src="http://vgh.homestead.com/files/RoninSmall.gif" style="border:0;"/><img src="http://vgh.homestead.com/files/ShinandBlueBird.gif" style="border:0;"/> 
pics edited by Gaeva 
nice of her, eh? 
</div>

Post by **Dead Rapter** » Fri Nov 14, 2003 3:01 pm

Please post all comments here... First post up too in creative woodworks... though I should have put it in HVR....

<div style="text-align:center"> 
I'll miss the winter 
A world of fragile things 
Look for me in the white forest 
Hiding in a hollow tree 
 
~My Last Breath, Evanscenece~ 
<hr /> 
<img src="http://vgh.homestead.com/files/RoninSmall.gif" style="border:0;"/><img src="http://vgh.homestead.com/files/ShinandBlueBird.gif" style="border:0;"/> 
pics edited by Gaeva 
nice of her, eh? 
</div>

Post by **Dead Rapter** » Sat Nov 15, 2003 6:51 am

Typos? Where? I thought I went back in to correct 'em!

<div style="text-align:center"> 
I'll miss the winter 
A world of fragile things 
Look for me in the white forest 
Hiding in a hollow tree 
 
~My Last Breath, Evanscenece~ 
<hr /> 
<img src="http://vgh.homestead.com/files/RoninSmall.gif" style="border:0;"/><img src="http://vgh.homestead.com/files/ShinandBlueBird.gif" style="border:0;"/> 
pics edited by Gaeva 
nice of her, eh? 
</div>

Post by **FaultedMoonlight** » Sat Nov 15, 2003 8:49 am

Typos more as in mispellings so if you didn't know it's mispelled, you wouldn't have noticed. ^.^ <img src=http://www.ezboard.com/images/emoticons/wink.gif ALT=";)"> 
 
I like it. Nice and creative and like the things I always plan in my head but never get on paper so extra congrats to you on being able to do it. <img src=http://vgh.homestead.com/files/thumbsup.gif ALT=":thumbsup"> 
 
I'm slightly confused though. When you told me to read it I thought it had something to do with Shin concerning UV. Does it or am I just missing something? <img src=http://amiga.org/images/smilies/icon_razz.gif ALT=":P"> 
 
EDIT: N/M. Just noticed the poll thread that explains why it was written. <img src=http://vgh.homestead.com/files/Sweatdrops.gif ALT=":sweatdrops">

Edited by: <A HREF=http://pub123.ezboard.com/bunicornsvisi ... onlight</A> at: 11/14/03 22:57

Post by **Dead Rapter** » Sat Nov 15, 2003 8:57 am

Heads! As soon as I come back from my haircut, I'm going to type and post part two!

<div style="text-align:center"> 
I'll miss the winter 
A world of fragile things 
Look for me in the white forest 
Hiding in a hollow tree 
 
~My Last Breath, Evanscenece~ 
<hr /> 
<img src="http://vgh.homestead.com/files/RoninSmall.gif" style="border:0;"/><img src="http://vgh.homestead.com/files/ShinandBlueBird.gif" style="border:0;"/> 
pics edited by Gaeva 
nice of her, eh? 
</div>

Post by **Anita4442001** » Sat Nov 15, 2003 9:04 am

Good! Cuz I'm bored.

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Post by **Dead Rapter** » Sat Nov 15, 2003 11:26 am

HA! Try to find them typo's NOW!!! HAHAAHAHA!!! Also.. After I eat dinner, I'll work on part two, I had a bad time at TRYING to get a haircut....

<div style="text-align:center"> 
I'll miss the winter 
A world of fragile things 
Look for me in the white forest 
Hiding in a hollow tree 
 
~My Last Breath, Evanscenece~ 
<hr /> 
<img src="http://vgh.homestead.com/files/RoninSmall.gif" style="border:0;"/><img src="http://vgh.homestead.com/files/ShinandBlueBird.gif" style="border:0;"/> 
pics edited by Gaeva 
nice of her, eh? 
</div>

Post by **Dead Rapter** » Sat Nov 15, 2003 3:40 pm

Double Post I know, but it's a COMPLETE different thing so... 
 
"Part two: All war is based on deception" is up!

<div style="text-align:center"> 
I'll miss the winter 
A world of fragile things 
Look for me in the white forest 
Hiding in a hollow tree 
 
~My Last Breath, Evanscenece~ 
<hr /> 
<img src="http://vgh.homestead.com/files/RoninSmall.gif" style="border:0;"/><img src="http://vgh.homestead.com/files/ShinandBlueBird.gif" style="border:0;"/> 
pics edited by Gaeva 
nice of her, eh? 
</div>

Post by **Dead Rapter** » Thu Nov 20, 2003 2:34 pm

POSTED!!!! It's an intermission though, ment to show you Shin alone by himself. 
 
EDIT: Edited all the posts to make them easier to read. Lemme know if it clears up any confusion! 
 
EDIT2: Grrr... No one commented.... Bleg.. Any who. Check out the tribute to Shin in the woodworks!

<div style="text-align:center"> 
I'll miss the winter 
A world of fragile things 
Look for me in the white forest 
Hiding in a hollow tree 
 
~My Last Breath, Evanscenece~ 
<hr /> 
<img src="http://vgh.homestead.com/files/RoninSmall.gif" style="border:0;"/><img src="http://vgh.homestead.com/files/ShinandBlueBird.gif" style="border:0;"/> 
pics edited by Gaeva 
nice of her, eh? 
</div>Edited by: <A HREF=http://pub123.ezboard.com/bunicornsvisi ... apter>Dead Rapter</A> <IMG HEIGHT=10 WIDTH=10 SRC="http://www.f22fighter.com/plane7-c.gif" BORDER=0> at: 11/21/03 22:04

Post by **Dead Rapter** » Sat Nov 22, 2003 7:58 am

Wait 'till the battle....

<div style="text-align:center"> 
I'll miss the winter 
A world of fragile things 
Look for me in the white forest 
Hiding in a hollow tree 
 
~My Last Breath, Evanscenece~ 
<hr /> 
<img src="http://vgh.homestead.com/files/RoninSmall.gif" style="border:0;"/><img src="http://vgh.homestead.com/files/ShinandBlueBird.gif" style="border:0;"/> 
pics edited by Gaeva 
nice of her, eh? 
</div>

Post by **Dead Rapter** » Sat Nov 22, 2003 3:51 pm

Yep.... It'll be very... Um... Violent...

<div style="text-align:center"> 
I'll miss the winter 
A world of fragile things 
Look for me in the white forest 
Hiding in a hollow tree 
 
~My Last Breath, Evanscenece~ 
<hr /> 
<img src="http://vgh.homestead.com/files/RoninSmall.gif" style="border:0;"/><img src="http://vgh.homestead.com/files/ShinandBlueBird.gif" style="border:0;"/> 
pics edited by Gaeva 
nice of her, eh? 
</div>

Post by **Dead Rapter** » Sun Nov 23, 2003 12:58 pm

ALERT!!! 
 
ALL much watch "The Last Samurai" with Tom Cruse!!!! It'll explain so much about the battle and how they fought! 
 
Also, if you see the preview to it, you'll notice flags stuck onto the back of a samurai armor. That's to tell who's who and is called the banner

<div style="text-align:center"> 
I'll miss the winter 
A world of fragile things 
Look for me in the white forest 
Hiding in a hollow tree 
 
~My Last Breath, Evanscenece~ 
<hr /> 
<img src="http://vgh.homestead.com/files/RoninSmall.gif" style="border:0;"/><img src="http://vgh.homestead.com/files/ShinandBlueBird.gif" style="border:0;"/> 
pics edited by Gaeva 
nice of her, eh? 
</div>

Post by **Dead Rapter** » Mon Nov 24, 2003 4:46 am

He's not a Samurai. He was a US officer during the UNS civil war era. The Japanese started to put down the swords and take up gun around this point in time. They requested America for an officer to train their soldiers in the art of gunnery. He was sent over.

<div style="text-align:center"> 
I'll miss the winter 
A world of fragile things 
Look for me in the white forest 
Hiding in a hollow tree 
 
~My Last Breath, Evanscenece~ 
<hr /> 
<img src="http://vgh.homestead.com/files/RoninSmall.gif" style="border:0;"/><img src="http://vgh.homestead.com/files/ShinandBlueBird.gif" style="border:0;"/> 
pics edited by Gaeva 
nice of her, eh? 
</div>

Post by **Dead Rapter** » Mon Nov 24, 2003 4:57 am

Why don't you answer that since you are the one who finds it odd...

<div style="text-align:center"> 
I'll miss the winter 
A world of fragile things 
Look for me in the white forest 
Hiding in a hollow tree 
 
~My Last Breath, Evanscenece~ 
<hr /> 
<img src="http://vgh.homestead.com/files/RoninSmall.gif" style="border:0;"/><img src="http://vgh.homestead.com/files/ShinandBlueBird.gif" style="border:0;"/> 
pics edited by Gaeva 
nice of her, eh? 
</div>

Post by **Dead Rapter** » Mon Nov 24, 2003 5:04 am

I'd go several times for the music alone!!! And it comes out int he US sometimes in December!!! MY December!

<div style="text-align:center"> 
I'll miss the winter 
A world of fragile things 
Look for me in the white forest 
Hiding in a hollow tree 
 
~My Last Breath, Evanscenece~ 
<hr /> 
<img src="http://vgh.homestead.com/files/RoninSmall.gif" style="border:0;"/><img src="http://vgh.homestead.com/files/ShinandBlueBird.gif" style="border:0;"/> 
pics edited by Gaeva 
nice of her, eh? 
</div>

Post by **Dead Rapter** » Mon Nov 24, 2003 5:12 am

Wow.. It's already out on video over here. Were you planning on making a trip to the US any time soon??? ::.grin:: Maybe you can see it then! 
 
Also, Gaeva ::.points to inbox::

<div style="text-align:center"> 
I'll miss the winter 
A world of fragile things 
Look for me in the white forest 
Hiding in a hollow tree 
 
~My Last Breath, Evanscenece~ 
<hr /> 
<img src="http://vgh.homestead.com/files/RoninSmall.gif" style="border:0;"/><img src="http://vgh.homestead.com/files/ShinandBlueBird.gif" style="border:0;"/> 
pics edited by Gaeva 
nice of her, eh? 
</div>

Post by **Dead Rapter** » Mon Nov 24, 2003 5:44 am

Make sure you stop by over here!!! PLease! i'm LONELY!!!!

<div style="text-align:center"> 
I'll miss the winter 
A world of fragile things 
Look for me in the white forest 
Hiding in a hollow tree 
 
~My Last Breath, Evanscenece~ 
<hr /> 
<img src="http://vgh.homestead.com/files/RoninSmall.gif" style="border:0;"/><img src="http://vgh.homestead.com/files/ShinandBlueBird.gif" style="border:0;"/> 
pics edited by Gaeva 
nice of her, eh? 
</div>

Post by **Dead Rapter** » Mon Nov 24, 2003 6:00 am

.............. I'm not even 4 hours from Miami. How POSSIBLY farther north can I be... How possibly COLDER can it be??? 
 
DO YOU HAVE ANY IDEA WHERE I AM GAEVA?!?!?!!?!?!?

<div style="text-align:center"> 
I'll miss the winter 
A world of fragile things 
Look for me in the white forest 
Hiding in a hollow tree 
 
~My Last Breath, Evanscenece~ 
<hr /> 
<img src="http://vgh.homestead.com/files/RoninSmall.gif" style="border:0;"/><img src="http://vgh.homestead.com/files/ShinandBlueBird.gif" style="border:0;"/> 
pics edited by Gaeva 
nice of her, eh? 
</div>

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